I pulled the blinds
sunlight percolated
into my domain
filigreed walls
swayed delicately
I felt your pull
drawing me into you
your heartbeat
hurtled into mine
in a staccato
ghosts of the past night
ran away so fast
that I couldn’t imagine
they had been there
lying absurdly between us
“now only you, I and
swaying filigreed walls“
Filed under: One Single Impression, free verse
wonderful. Have a great day.
wonderful. Have a great day.
Thank you for the comment on my blog. I suppose ought to write a poem about my birth mother's meeting, just to work it through! But you are right, it is the emotions and the bonds that count.
Thank you for the comment on my blog. I suppose ought to write a poem about my birth mother's meeting, just to work it through! But you are right, it is the emotions and the bonds that count.
I like the flow in this…….
I like the flow in this…….
Ahh, very delicate, my friend.
Ahh, very delicate, my friend.
So much tenderness and love in this reflection. Some ghosts are comforting.
So much tenderness and love in this reflection. Some ghosts are comforting.
I love the notion of sunlight percolating into the room on an early morning.
I love the notion of sunlight percolating into the room on an early morning.
Wow!!!Love this one.
Wow!!!Love this one.
This reads beautifully.
This reads beautifully.
That's lovely. Filigreed walls is such a compelling exotic image to me.
That's lovely. Filigreed walls is such a compelling exotic image to me.
Ripe with passion and yet delicately sensitive! Beautiful!
Ripe with passion and yet delicately sensitive! Beautiful!
it's far to human:
indistinct whorls of being;
red shorts blue top shine
it's far to human:
indistinct whorls of being;
red shorts blue top shine
beautiful…as usual.
beautiful…as usual.
"swaying filigreed walls" – a beautiful image!
"swaying filigreed walls" – a beautiful image!
Delicate, sensual images in this piece – written with such clarity. I truly enjoyed it.
Delicate, sensual images in this piece – written with such clarity. I truly enjoyed it.
Purely delightful.
Purely delightful.
very sweet read
loved the flow
Happy SS
Into The Absurd
very sweet read
loved the flow
Happy SS
Into The Absurd
This is beautiful!
have a great day
t
This is beautiful!
have a great day
t
I can see it…beautiful.
b
I can see it…beautiful.
b
You really have a lovely way of weaving words together, bravo
You really have a lovely way of weaving words together, bravo
oh so lovely.
I so enjoy seeing how things can shift.
oh so lovely.
I so enjoy seeing how things can shift.
That was Wow…
esp liked the lines…..
I felt your pull
drawing me into you
your heartbeat
hurtled into mine
in a staccato
(makes me shy)
That was Wow…
esp liked the lines…..
I felt your pull
drawing me into you
your heartbeat
hurtled into mine
in a staccato
(makes me shy)
So many wonderful lines in this. Thanks.
Parasite
So many wonderful lines in this. Thanks.
Parasite
Beautiful and enigmatic, and perfectly balanced.
Beautiful and enigmatic, and perfectly balanced.
Gautami, with a little more time I do believe I could fit Catherine the Great of Russian into the folds of your poem.
Your work here certainly draws me in and right away I thought of her, even of her sordid 'love life.'
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Gautami, with a little more time I do believe I could fit Catherine the Great of Russian into the folds of your poem.
Your work here certainly draws me in and right away I thought of her, even of her sordid 'love life.'
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You're on with "assimilated" next week!
You're on with "assimilated" next week!
Ain't it the truth–dang ghosts won't stay around to play or fight in the daylight.
Tight and dry!
Thanks–
Ain't it the truth–dang ghosts won't stay around to play or fight in the daylight.
Tight and dry!
Thanks–
Beautiful poem. I have been looking for some wooden roll-up shades for my fron porch & they remind me of the filigried walls that you speak of.
xoxo,
JP/deb
Beautiful poem. I have been looking for some wooden roll-up shades for my fron porch & they remind me of the filigried walls that you speak of.
xoxo,
JP/deb
Lovely rhythm. Reminds me on one I wrote.
Lovely rhythm. Reminds me on one I wrote.
This is a beautifully written piece. Thanks for sharing.
This is a beautifully written piece. Thanks for sharing.
Excellent-and very romantic!
Excellent-and very romantic!
your heartbeat
hurtled into mine
in a staccato
I can almost feel the pounding!
Stealing Time #5
your heartbeat
hurtled into mine
in a staccato
I can almost feel the pounding!
Stealing Time #5
very beautiful. love the entire concept. good job!
very beautiful. love the entire concept. good job!
kind of romantic in the beginning, but kind of sorrowful at the end, a relationship not yet fruitful, perhaps?
kind of romantic in the beginning, but kind of sorrowful at the end, a relationship not yet fruitful, perhaps?
Nice piece, filled with so many pleasant images.
Nice piece, filled with so many pleasant images.
Filigreed walls – a beautiful image and words to match.
Filigreed walls – a beautiful image and words to match.
Rippling walls that let the light in. How lovely.
Rippling walls that let the light in. How lovely.
how interesting! not sure what I would do with the word "wall"
how interesting! not sure what I would do with the word "wall"
Tami, this wonderful A clever
use of the prompt I really like your images and the way your wolds flow. This almost seem like a dream scape, where all that is lovely yet sad vanishes in the morning light. Where all that is warm and good awaits you.
I just loved this.
love, Melanie-bd
Tami, this wonderful A clever
use of the prompt I really like your images and the way your wolds flow. This almost seem like a dream scape, where all that is lovely yet sad vanishes in the morning light. Where all that is warm and good awaits you.
I just loved this.
love, Melanie-bd
beautiful, romantically passionate.
beautiful, romantically passionate.
dumb not to understand the context.
But the first para, of sunlight entering and gushing, the swaying effect is wonderful.
dumb not to understand the context.
But the first para, of sunlight entering and gushing, the swaying effect is wonderful.
"Ghosts… ran away so fast"…couldn't imagine…lying absurdly between us.
Very compelling piece.
Kat
"Ghosts… ran away so fast"…couldn't imagine…lying absurdly between us.
Very compelling piece.
Kat