spooky does it..

Posted on June 15, 2009 by gautami tripathy


he arrived dead tired into the farm-
stopped at the stables, tended the horses
his own soothing words made him fall asleep
in his waking dreamy state he saw
a lantern light from deeper in the barn
shone on a man and woman in the door-
step, their raised voices got to him
he rose and walked towards them

he stumbled on a weed and fell on the door
when he got inside the room to see more
like two kids they were lying on the floor
having fistfights over an stupid apple core

Filed under: carry on tuesday, free verse, monday poetry train revisted

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34 Responses

  1. anthonynorth, on June 15th, 2009 at 5:55 pm Said:

    Well that certainly wasn't the ending I was expecting :-)

  2. anthonynorth, on June 15th, 2009 at 5:55 pm Said:

    Well that certainly wasn't the ending I was expecting :-)

  3. Jeeves, on June 15th, 2009 at 6:27 pm Said:

    Hahaa. Enjoyed this one

  4. Jeeves, on June 15th, 2009 at 6:27 pm Said:

    Hahaa. Enjoyed this one

  5. Julia Smith, on June 15th, 2009 at 6:57 pm Said:

    This is almost lighthearted!

  6. Julia Smith, on June 15th, 2009 at 6:57 pm Said:

    This is almost lighthearted!

  7. jabblog, on June 15th, 2009 at 7:55 pm Said:

    Very good- a nice twist.

  8. jabblog, on June 15th, 2009 at 7:55 pm Said:

    Very good- a nice twist.

  9. sage, on June 15th, 2009 at 9:49 pm Said:

    i like the way you mix up styles, you're always good with surprises.

  10. sage, on June 15th, 2009 at 9:49 pm Said:

    i like the way you mix up styles, you're always good with surprises.

  11. Just someone, on June 15th, 2009 at 9:54 pm Said:

    Budding poet

  12. Just someone, on June 15th, 2009 at 9:54 pm Said:

    Budding poet

  13. Michelle Johnson, on June 15th, 2009 at 10:16 pm Said:

    Having lived on a farm I enjoyed reading this one very much. Great twist at the end. Hope all is well.

  14. Michelle Johnson, on June 15th, 2009 at 10:16 pm Said:

    Having lived on a farm I enjoyed reading this one very much. Great twist at the end. Hope all is well.

  15. Linda Jacobs, on June 16th, 2009 at 4:58 am Said:

    Too funny! I like the rhyming at the end!

  16. Linda Jacobs, on June 16th, 2009 at 4:58 am Said:

    Too funny! I like the rhyming at the end!

  17. Marja, on June 16th, 2009 at 9:48 am Said:

    Great work with a nice surprise It is not always as we think it is

  18. Marja, on June 16th, 2009 at 9:48 am Said:

    Great work with a nice surprise It is not always as we think it is

  19. sam, on June 16th, 2009 at 10:18 am Said:

    O.O This is certainly interesting. :) Thanks for your comments over at my blog :)

  20. sam, on June 16th, 2009 at 10:18 am Said:

    O.O This is certainly interesting. :) Thanks for your comments over at my blog :)

  21. Andy Sewina, on June 17th, 2009 at 2:20 am Said:

    Love the ending!

  22. Andy Sewina, on June 17th, 2009 at 2:20 am Said:

    Love the ending!

  23. Missy, on June 17th, 2009 at 8:20 am Said:

    Nice.

  24. Missy, on June 17th, 2009 at 8:20 am Said:

    Nice.

  25. quin browne, on June 17th, 2009 at 11:02 am Said:

    made me smile.

  26. quin browne, on June 17th, 2009 at 11:02 am Said:

    made me smile.

  27. cyclopseven, on June 17th, 2009 at 11:22 am Said:

    an ending with fistfights..:) I like that.

  28. cyclopseven, on June 17th, 2009 at 11:22 am Said:

    an ending with fistfights..:) I like that.

  29. Selma, on June 17th, 2009 at 7:56 pm Said:

    Those pesky kids. Good one!

  30. Selma, on June 17th, 2009 at 7:56 pm Said:

    Those pesky kids. Good one!

  31. Pam, on June 17th, 2009 at 9:13 pm Said:

    This is an enjoyable read. I like that you completely changed the form and voice in the last stanza by using rhyme.

  32. Pam, on June 17th, 2009 at 9:13 pm Said:

    This is an enjoyable read. I like that you completely changed the form and voice in the last stanza by using rhyme.

  33. lissa, on June 18th, 2009 at 7:41 am Said:

    unexpected ending but I like the build-up

  34. lissa, on June 18th, 2009 at 7:41 am Said:

    unexpected ending but I like the build-up

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